The positive side of \"Are smartphones ruining our world?\"
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Hello, I\'m Hana, and I\'d like to present my opinion on the topic, \"Are smartphones ruining our world?\". I think smartphones are ruining our world. First, a literacy of people is decreasing by using smartphones. As you know, recent students like short-contents such Shorts of Reels. As students continue to watch short-form content on their smartphones, the amount of reading they do is decreasing. Therefore, students\' literacy are also decreasing now. E-books exist as an alternative, but they are very bad for students\' eye health.
Second, people\'s dependence on smartphones is worsening. It is also connected with smartphone addiction, but I want to argue that the need for smartphones has gone beyond the norm. Among the AI ​​systems installed in smartphones, those related to food, clothing, and shelter are helpful to human life. However, AI technologies that provide knowledge, such as ChatGPT, are being abused over time. For example, Some student copy what ChatGPT says and do their homework
강사 첨삭
Hi, Hana! Thank you for these wonderful insights again. Let\'s discuss it more in the class. See you.
--Teacher Anji
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I think smartphones are ruining our world.
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First, a literacy of people is decreasing by using smartphones.
>> First, people\'s literary is decreasing due to the use of smartphones.
As you know, recent students like short-contents such Shorts of Reels.
>> As you know, recent students prefer short content, such as Shorts or Reels.
As students continue to watch short-form content on their smartphones, the amount of reading they do is decreasing.
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Therefore, students\' literacy are also decreasing now.
>> Therefore, students\' literacy is also decreasing now.
E-books exist as an alternative, but they are very bad for students\' eye health.
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Second, people\'s dependence on smartphones is worsening. It is also connected with smartphone addiction, but I want to argue that the need for smartphones has gone beyond the norm.
Second, people\'s dependence on smartphones is worsening. It is also connected with smartphone addiction, but I want to argue that the need for smartphones has gone beyond the norm.
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Among the AI technology systems installed in smartphones, those related to food, clothing, and shelter are helpful to human life.
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However, AI technologies that provide knowledge, such as ChatGPT, are being abused over time.
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For example, Some student copy what ChatGPT says and do their homework.
>> For example, some students copy what ChatGPT says and do their homework.
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