The positive side of \"Is a college education worth it?\"
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello, I\'m Hana, and I\'d like to present my opinion on the topic, \"Is a college education worth it?\" I think the college education is worth it. First, we can deeply learn various kinds of studies by taking college education. For example, the history of learning at school consists of a one-dimensional concept. However, when we study private history in college, we conduct inquiry activities such as various interpretations based on historical records. Second, The present age requires someone who has studied at university. For example, Korean conglomerates, such as Samsung and LG, tend to mostly hire people who have completed university courses. For this rea[이름], Korean students study hard for entrance exams with the goal of entering university.
The need for college study varies from per[이름] to per[이름]. Some Korean students are the first to get a job rather than enter university. However, college education is necessary because it includes essential elements and knowledge before getting a job.
강사 첨삭
Hana, thank you for the great talk about this in the class. See you!
-Teacher Anji
Hello, I\'m Hana, and I\'d like to present my opinion on the topic, \"Is a college education worth it?\"
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I think the college education is worth it.
>>I think a college education is worth it.
First, we can deeply learn various kinds of studies by taking college education.
>>First, we can deeply learn various kinds of studies by pursuing a college education.
For example, the history of learning at school consists of a one-dimensional concept.
>>For example, the history taught at school consists of a one-dimensional concept.
However, when we study private history in college, we conduct inquiry activities such as various interpretations based on historical records.
>>However, when we study history in college, we engage in inquiry activities such as exploring various interpretations based on historical records.
Second, the present age requires someone who has studied at university.
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For example, Korean conglomerates, such as Samsung and LG, tend to mostly hire people who have completed university courses.
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For this rea[이름], Korean students study hard for entrance exams with the goal of entering university.
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The need for college study varies from per[이름] to per[이름].
The need for college study varies from per[이름] to per[이름].
>> The need for a college education varies from per[이름] to per[이름].
Some Korean students are the first to get a job rather than enter university.
>> Some Korean students prefer to get a job first rather than attend university.
However, college education is necessary because it includes essential elements and knowledge before getting a job.
>> However, a college education is necessary because it includes essential elements and knowledge needed before getting a job.
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