THe possession of arms

2017-10-30 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

학생이 쓴 원문

The dead 58. The wounded 515. Do you know what the result means? Stephen paddock was an American mass murderer responsible for the 2017 Las Vegas shooting. He fired modified semi-automatic weapons from his room on the 32nd floor of the Mandalay Bay hotel into a crowd of approximately 22,000 concertgoers at a country music festival on the Las Vegas Strip on October 1, 2017. IS claimed that they were directed. However, the police said it was only a single act. The criminal moved in thorough plan. We searched for a good place to shoot. And he fired shots at the highlight of the performance. However, he has already committed suicide and could not blame himself. His brother is curious about his brother`s motives for the crime. It was the terrible that we have ever heard. I read a news about the victim`s family. I was regretted to listen such a catastrophic news.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]! I agree with you. It was indeed a catastrophic incident. So, we should always be vigilant whenever we are because such incidents may happen anytime and anywhere. Take care always!

~Teacher Chloe

The dead 58. The wounded 515.

>>The are 58 died and 515 wounded.

Do you know what the result means?

>>Correct!

Stephen paddock was an American mass murderer responsible for the 2017 Las Vegas shooting.

>>Stephen Paddock is an American mass murderer responsible for the 2017 Las Vegas shooting.

He fired modified semi-automatic weapons from his room on the 32nd floor of the Mandalay Bay hotel into a crowd of approximately 22,000 concertgoers at a country music festival on the Las Vegas Strip on October 1, 2017.

>>He fired modified semi-automatic weapons from his room on the 32nd floor of the Mandalay Bay hotel into a crowd of approximately 22,000 concertgoers at the country Music Festival on the Las Vegas Strip on October 1, 2017.

IS claimed that they were directed.

>>Correct!

However, the police said it was only a single act.

>>Correct!

The criminal moved in thorough plan.

>>Correct!

We searched for a good place to shoot.

>>Correct!

And he fired shots at the highlight of the performance.

>>Correct!

However, he has already committed suicide and could not blame himself.

>>However, he has already committed suicide and could not blame him.

His brother is curious about his brother`s motives for the crime. 

>>Correct!

It was the terrible that we have ever heard.

>>It is one of the terrible incidents that we have ever heard.

I read a news about the victim`s family.

>>Correct!

I was regretted to listen such a catastrophic news.

>>I regretted to know such a catastrophic news.   

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