The problem of a aging population
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A aging population has many implication.
It means people who can work in nation are decreasing.
And then country’s economic power is getting weak.
It caused by people don’t be concerned their next generation.
That problem makes country’s competition got lost.
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Ms. [이름]ny!
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Thank you for doing your homework and it is bothersome that most people are more concern about the present. How about the future? By the way, this is also a global phenomenon and it is not only happening in Korea.
Have a great morning!
Aki~
A aging population has many implication.
>>> An aging population has many implications.
It means people who can work in nation are decreasing.
>>> It means people who can work in the nation is decreasing.
And then country’s economic power is getting weak.
>>> And then the country’s economic power is getting weak.
It caused by people don’t be concerned their next generation.
>>> It is caused by people not being concerned about the next generation.
That problem makes country’s competition got lost.
>>> That problem causes the country’s competition to get lost.
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