The reason I want to study medicine
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion, the goal of nursing science is to raise a generalist. For example, nusing doesn't seperate the nurse depending on the subject. When a patient has a disease, his nurse will take care of all about him. The nurse would care about his kidney, heart, and pain problems. Nursing pursues total care about patients, which is very important and patients need to have. On the other hand, in terms of medicine, the goal is definately different from nursing. They focus on only one topic or field and try to be a specialist. Working as a nurse let me know that medicine would more fit for me. I want to be a specialist on a specific filed. That's why I chose to study medicine.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름],
This is a very candid composition, I think knowing what you really want will help you in choosing your course.
I'm glad knowing that you like your chosen field.
Teacher Rj
In my opinion, the goal of nursing science is to raise a generalist.
>> Correct
For example, nusing doesn't seperate the nurse depending on the subject.
>> For example, nursing doesn't separate the nurse depending on the subject.
When a patient has a disease, his nurse will take care of all about him.
>> When a patient has a disease or is sick, his/her nurse will take care of him/her.
The nurse would care about his kidney, heart, and pain problems.
>> The nurse will take care of his organs and any sickness.
Nursing pursues total care about patients, which is very important and patients need to have.
>> Nurses pursues total care about patients this is really very important.
On the other hand, in terms of medicine, the goal is definitely different from nursing.
>> Correct
They focus on only one topic or field and try to be a specialist.
>> Correct
Working as a nurse let me know that medicine would more fit for me.
>> Correct
I want to be a specialist on a specific filed.
>> Correct
That's why I chose to study medicine.
>> Correct
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