The reason of wanting of being a teacher
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I have wanted to be a teacher since when I was young and my dream has never changed until now.For me it seemed to be a natural progression because my father is a teacher so I had many chances to be heard relating education and school.However,the most powerful influence was my childhood memory on Teacher's Day.When I was an elementary school student,my father brought a lot of presents from students on Teacher's Day and many students visited my home.We had lunch,took a picture and talked a lot.We were spending very good time together and I was so proud of my fahter.
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Hi there [이름] I guess you're right, we all have had an event in our life and it became the turning point of what we want to do in the future.
I'm happy that you have yours and it actually inspired me to teach with the willingness to touch the lives of others as well! By the way here are your corrections:
I have wanted to be a teacher since when I was young and my dream has never changed until now.
>> I've always wanted to become a teacher, ever since I was young
For me it seemed to be a natural progression because my father is a teacher so I had many chances to be heard relating education and school.
>> For me it seems to run in the blood, because my father is a teacher. I also get the chance to hear about his experiences in teaching and learn a lot from him.
However,the most powerful influence was my childhood memory on Teacher's Day.When I was an elementary school student,my father brought a lot of presents from students on Teacher's Day and many students visited my home.
>>my father brought a lot of presents from his students on Teacher's day and many students visited him at home.
We had lunch,took a picture and talked a lot.We were spending very good time together and I was so proud of my fahter.
>>We've spent a very/really good time together.
*fahter : father
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