The reason why and what can we do for people who are not active as the past
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The reason why people are not active as the past is the world developed. As the world developed our lives became so convenient. For example we can delivered many things such as food,clothes,furniture and more.... We just sign and pay in the internet we can delivered.
It\'s very convenient so even though their not busy or they can\'t go the place for the situation. These behavior usually come from laziness, depression such like this. So if they aren\'t in the situation that they can\'t go the place for some reason, we should encourage to go outside. Because if we go outside we can relax and refresh our minds.
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The reason why people are not active as the past is the world developed.
>>> The reason why people are not active as in the past is the world\'s development.
As the world developed our lives became so convenient.
>>> As the world develops our lives become so convenient.
For example we can delivered many things such as food,clothes,furniture and more....
>>> For example we can have a lot of things to be delivered such as food, clothes, furniture and more.
We just sign and pay in the internet we can delivered.
>>> We just sign up and pay through the internet for our orders.
It\'s very convenient so even though their not busy or they can\'t go the place for the situation.
It\'s very convenient so even though their not busy or they can\'t go the place for the situation.
>>> It\'s very convenient even though they\'re not busy or they can\'t go to the place to order.
These behavior usually come from laziness, depression such like this.
>>> This behavior usually comes from laziness and depressions.
So if they aren\'t in the situation that they can\'t go the place for some reason, we should encourage to go outside.
>>> So if they aren\'t in the situation where they can\'t go the place for some reasons, we should encourage them to go outside.
Because if we go outside we can relax and refresh our minds.
>>> CORRECT
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