The reason why I drunk yesterday.
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It\'s me again^^
Well, in your sentences we can also use \"thus\". There are other expressions like \"then\", \"therefore\", \"hence\", \"and so\" and \"consequently\".
Try to use these expressions too. :)
Teacher, I\'m sorry yesterday.
>>CORRECT!
Because I got drunk and I couldn\'t remember what I said.
>>CORRECT!
Actually, president invited our office members to his house.
>>Actually, the President invited people from my office to his house.
But, He had an important meeting, so he canceled an appointment with us.
>>But he canceled his appointment with us because he had an important meeting.
He were sorry about that, so he treated us to eat pork belly for lunch.
>>He was sorry about it so he treated us to eat pork belly for lunch.
From the time we started drinking for 1hour.
>>From that time we started drinking for one hour.
Because our lunch time is 1hour.
>>Because our lunch break is for one hour.
one of manager wanted to drink again after working time.
>>One of the managers wanted to drink again after work.
So, we started drinking again after 6P.M.
>>So we went drinking again after 6 p.m.
Yesterday, I felt not good.
>>Yesterday, I felt bad.
Because I coudn\'t sleep well and felt I got drunk easily.
>>Because I felt I couldn\'t sleep well and drank easily.
Although condition was not good, I drunk with coworkers.
>>I wasn\'t feeling well, but I drank with my coworkers.
We ate fresh fish, but unfortunally, I don\'t like fish food.
>>We had fresh fish, but unfortunately I don\'t like fish food.
Then, I got drunk easily........too sad.
>>CORRECT!
I wanted to move another restaurant, but, no one wanted to go another restaurant.
>>I wanted to move another restaurant, but nobody wanted to go to another restaurant.
So, I gave up to to another bar and went back home.
>>I gave up that we are going to move to another restaurant and went back home.
I felt lonely again..lol
>>I felt lonely again. LOL!
Teacher, I use \'so\' many times.
>>Teacher, I used \"so\" many times.
Can you tell me another synonym \'so\'?
>>Can you tell me another synonym for \"so\"?
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