The reason why I prefer relaxed traveling
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- T. Beth
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>>> Each person has his/her own way of traveling but I’m a the kind of person who travels in a relaxed mood with a slow tempo.
This is because I think traveling is the time of thinking about myself and finding
another side of me, and refreshing after busy-life.
>>> correct.
For example, when I travel around places, I like to walk on the streets and look
around sights of the places different from where I live.
>>> correct
I also like to visit galleries or art museums while traveling and this behaviors
make me think in a new way and give inspirations to me.
>>> I also like to visit galleries or art museums while traveling and this behavior makes me think in a new way and gives inspirations to me.
This experiences cannot be achieved if I traveling with a tight schedule or fast
tempo busy with looking around tons of places.
>>> These experiences cannot be achieved if I travel with a tight schedule or fast tempo busy with looking around tons of places.
Also, I prefer to travel with fewer than two people because, I don’t like to be in a
crowded mood and I like to enjoy the deep conversations while visiting new places.
>>> Also, I prefer to travel with fewer than two people because I don’t like to be in a crowded mood and I like to enjoy the deep conversations while visiting new places.
Having conversations with close people around me helps me understands about
myself more and also about them, so through this I can discover a new aspects of
me.
>>> Having conversations with close people around me helps me understand about myself more and also about them, so through this I can discover new aspects of me.
This experience can only be get with a relaxed, calm mood even when traveling.
>>> This experience can only be taken with a relaxed, calm mood even when traveling.
>>> OR: This experience can only be achieved with a relaxed, calm mood even when traveling.
I prefer this kind of traveling way to have these advantages.
>>> correct
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