The reason why I think the corp price will increase in 2012
학생이 쓴 원문
Now globla warmining effects happen every place in earth. Atually it shows no steady changes of ambient temperature after year 2004. it means the balance of heat energy tranportation between earth and sun doesn't exist anymore. You can easily understand this symptum which the water's teamperature will grow up by larger heat input than loses.
More over,it doesn't stop now and continuosly warms up and irritates air & water circulation system of this planet. For example, this year a farmer starts to throw seeds which are good at current climate but he will have to find out other northern farm area for better condition after several years plantation by warming. What does it mean ? it means cost , lots of cost. Everyone knows this earth faces typical global warming effect but doesn't know it will bring severe changes to the social system and individual life . It would be burden to everybody who want to eat vegitables and furuits produced by farmers in right place & right way.
강사 첨삭
Hello there, Sir [이름]! I am very glad about this very meaningful and sincere essay you made for the environment. Thanks for drafting this. As we see each other in class later, let us try to discuss some of the things mentioned here. See you on your next essay!
~T. Donna
Now globla warmining effects happen every place in earth.
>> Now, global warming effects happen in every place on earth.
Atually it shows no steady changes of ambient temperature after year 2004.
>> Actually it shows no steady change of ambient temperature after the year 2004.
it means the balance of heat energy tranportation between earth and sun doesn\'t exist anymore.
>> It means that the balance of heat energy transported between the earth and sun doesn\'t exist anymore.
You can easily understand this symptum which the water\'s teamperature will grow up by larger heat input than loses.>> You can easily understand this symptom wherein the water\'s temperature will grow higher by larger heat input than it will lose.More over,it doesn\'t stop now and continuosly warms up and irritates air & water circulation system of this planet.
>> Moreover, it doesn\'t stop now and it continuously warms up and irritates the air and water circulation system of this planet.
For example, this year a farmer starts to throw seeds which are good at current climate but he will have to find out other northern farm area for better condition after several years plantation by warming.
>> For example this year, a farmer starts to throw seeds which are good for the current climate but he will have to find out the northern farm area for better condition after several years of planting by the warming.
What does it mean?
>> Correct! Or also: What does this mean?
it means cost , lots of cost.
>> It means cost , lots of cost.
Everyone knows this earth faces typical global warming effect but doesn\'t know it will bring severe changes to the social system and individual life .
>> Correct! *effects
It would be burden to everybody who want to eat vegitables and furuits produced by farmers in right place & right way.
>> It would be a burden to everybody who wants to eat vegetables and fruits produced by farmers in right place and the right way.
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.