the reason why outdoor activities are important to student.
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some students feel tired from studying. In that case, it is good to relieve fatigue by doing outdoor activities. and it can provent many disease from stress of studying. outdoor activities are really important to study. some people say studying is a physical fight. so doing studying with steady outdoor activities are better t[이름] only doing studying
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some students feel tired from studying.
>> Correct!
OR: Some students become exhausted while studying.
OR: Some students become exhausted while studying.
In that case, it is good to relieve fatigue by doing outdoor activities.
>> In that case, doing outdoor activities can relieve fatigue.
and it can provent many disease from stress of studying.
>> It can also prevent causing many diseases as a result of the stress of studying.
outdoor activities are really important to study.
>> Outdoor activities are really important for studying.
some people say studying is a physical fight.
>> Some people think that studying is a physical struggle.
so doing studying with steady outdoor activities are better t[이름] only doing studying
>> So studying combined with consistent outdoor activities is preferable to studying alone.
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