The researcher\'s life
학생이 쓴 원문
Ten years later, maybe I\'m a researcher who is belong to research institute operated by goverment. I\'ll upgrade the level of biomedical diagnosis method through my research and lower the number of incurable illness patients in the world. Second of all, I want the Work-Life-Valance. I think It\'s important not only research but my own time. After my proper effort in job, I must get rest well. For example, playing football, fishing, drinking and getting a time with my family. If these two things are guaranteed, my life will be so good.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Brian!
That sounds like a fulfilling and meaningful career path you\'re envisioning! It\'s great that you\'re considering both professional success and personal well-being in your plans for the future. Thanks for sharing your goals.
~ Teacher Maxine :)
Ten years later, maybe I\'m a researcher who is belong to research institute operated by goverment.
>> Ten years later, maybe I\'ll be a researcher belonging to a government-operated research institute.
I\'ll upgrade the level of biomedical diagnosis method through my research and lower the number of incurable illness patients in the world.
>> I\'ll upgrade the level of biomedical diagnosis methods through my research and lower the number of patients with incurable illnesses in the world.
Second of all, I want the Work-Life-Valance.
>> Secondly, I want to achieve work-life balance.
I think It\'s important not only research but my own time.
>> I think it\'s important not only for research but also for my own time.
After my proper effort in job, I must get rest well.
>> After putting proper effort into my job, I must get proper rest.
For example, playing football, fishing, drinking and getting a time with my family.
>> For example, playing football, fishing, relaxing with a drink, and spending time with my family.
If these two things are guaranteed, my life will be so good.
>>CORRECT!
OR >> If I can count on these two things, my life will be greatly improved.
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