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by this, I apply this university and I long for study english deeply. I entirely sure this university will be wing for me to go on a top in the world like diplomatic officer. there are many aspects of me. but I don't have enought time for writting other things. Thank you for listening my adress? karla do you have another expression about like a "thank you for listening my speech"

Hello [이름]! This composition of yours is so serious and you wrote it pretty well. I can sense that you are very eager and excited to go to this university. Anyway, these are the corrections. And also, I've put other ways for you to express your ideas. Karla   by this, I apply this university and I long for study english deeply. >>By this, I apply in this university and I long to study English intensively. >>Other:Through this, I will apply in the university where I hope to study English further. I entirely sure this university will be wing for me to go on a top in the world like diplomatic officer. >>I'm entirely sure that this university will be my wings for me me to go on top of the world as a diplomatic officer. >>Other: I'm very sure that this university will by my step to the top of the world as a diplomatic officer.there are many aspects of me. >>CORRECT >>OTHER: There are many aspects of my personality. but I don't have enought time for writting other things. >>But I don't have enough time to write other things. >>Other: However, I don't have the time to state more details. Thank you for listening my adress? >>Thank you for listening to my address. >>Other: I want to express my gratitude for listening to my speech. >>Other: I appreciate that you've listened to my speech. >>Other: I acknowledge your generosity for listening to my speech. >>Other: I am grateful that you've listened to my speech.karla do you have another expression about like a "thank you for listening my speech" >>Karla do you know other expressions similar to "thank you for listening to my speech."