The richest man in the world.
학생이 쓴 원문
I read the book about Bill Gates this time. He is one of the richest men in the
world. He was born in Seattle on October in 1955. After their parents moved him
to Lakeside school, he was interested in computer. He entered Harvard University
in 1973, but he didn't graduate school. Because he wanted to start his own
computer company. By the age of 19, he founded Microsoft and it was hit. So he was
billionaires. Then, he founded the Bill_Melinda Gates Foundation which help to
poor people. When he is not working, he likes to read books and play golf.
This story doesen't change my mind anything. Because I cannot feel sympathy.
강사 첨삭
Hello there!Thank you for sharing the story of life Bill Gates. Maybe, his life is not that interesting for you. Well, I think the lesson that we can learn from his story is not to give up easily and to share your blessings to the poor people. I hope you can find a beautiful book that will inspire you. See you later!T.Nina.
I read the book about Bill Gates this time. >> This time, I have read the book about Bill Gates.>>OR I am reading a book about Bill Gates nowadays.He is one of the richest men in the world. >>Correct!He was born in Seattle on October in 1955. >> Correct!After their parents moved him to Lakeside school, he was interested in computer. >> After their parents moved him to Lakeside school, he got interested in computer. He entered Harvard University in 1973, but he didn\'t graduate school. >>He entered Harvard University in 1973, but he didn\'t graduate in that school. >>OR He entered Harvard University in 1973, but he didn\'t graduate. Because he wanted to start his own computer company. >> Correct!By the age of 19, he founded Microsoft and it was hit. >> By the age of 19, he founded Microsoft and it was a hit. So he was billionaires. >>So he became a billionare.Then, he founded the Bill_Melinda Gates Foundation which help to poor people. >> He is the founder of the Bill_Melinda Gates Foundation which help poor people. When he is not working, he likes to read books and play golf.>> Correct!
This story doesen\'t change my mind anything. >> This story did not change my mind at all.Because I cannot feel sympathy. >>Correct!
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