The second generation of Korean immigrants
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The second generation of Koream immigrants in the US are doing great in political filed. According to the article, they are very well prepared to perform politician's role. I'm glad to hear that since I think we need to have a political power to make it come ture, which we want it to be real. Meanwhile, I ask them to be more special about their job as a politician. They are a small group in the US even though we think that the US consists of many different races. So, they need to be concerned about the people who are not in the main stream since we are likely to ignore the opinion from a few people.
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The second generation of Koream immigrants in the US are doing great in political filed.
>>correct
According to the article, they are very well prepared to perform politician's role.
>>According to the article, they are very well prepared to perform in a politician's role.
I'm glad to hear that since I think we need to have a political power to make it come ture, which we want it to be real.
>>I'm glad to hear that since I think we need to have some political power for our hopes to come true.
Meanwhile, I ask them to be more special about their job as a politician.
>>Meanwhile, I ask them to act more special about their job as a politician.
They are a small group in the US even though we think that the US consists of many different races.
>>correct
So, they need to be concerned about the people who are not in the main stream since we are likely to ignore the opinion from a few people.
>>So, they need to be concerned about the people who are not in the main stream since we are likely to be ignored.
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