The secret of a birth

2010-03-25 · 첨삭 강사 Jennifer

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Have you ever seen an amazing scene of a birth? If you were a husband of a waman delivered of a child, it would be possible. However it wasn't allowed for children, except me. When I was four years old, my mom was pregnant with her third child. At that time, I didn't know mom's pregnancy, because I was so young. One day, all of my family gathered at my house and they looked busy. I was in yard, my mom was coming out with my grandmother and aunt. Suddenly something fell on the wooden floor from my mom, I was really surprised. It was a baby, she became my younger sister. That scene was not forgotten in my memory, even though my age was just four. It was special experience in my life.

강사 첨삭

[이름], This was both interesting and amazing! Actually, I have seen a lot of women give birth before. It might have been through the normal way or through an operation, the experiences were similarly amazing! My major was Nursing when I was in the university and I was able to witness a lot of birthing sessions. I couldn’t help but be amazed with this wonderful process. Anyhow, I am so happy to hear that you had the same experience and feeling when you saw your mom give birth. Thanks for writing your experience here and you did a great job! XOXO, Jenny Have you ever seen an amazing scene of a birth? >>Have you ever seen the amazing scene of giving birth? If you were a husband of a waman delivered of a child, it would be possible. >>If you were the husband of a woman delivering a child, it would be possible. However it wasn't allowed for children, except me. >>For children, it wasn’t allowed, however, I was an exceptional. When I was four years old, my mom was pregnant with her third child. >> When I was four years old, my mom got pregnant with our third sibling. At that time, I didn't know mom's pregnancy, because I was so young. >> At that time. I didn’t have any idea of her pregnancy or what was it about because I was so young. One day, all of my family gathered at my house and they looked busy. >> One day, all of my family members gathered at my house and they all looked busy. I was in yard, my mom was coming out with my grandmother and aunt. >>I was in the yard when I saw my mom together with my grandmother and aunt coming out of the house.Suddenly something fell on the wooden floor from my mom, I was really surprised. It was a baby, she became my younger sister. >> Suddenly, something fell on the wooden floor that came from my mom and I was really surprised! It was a baby and that was my younger sister!That scene was not forgotten in my memory, even though my age was just four. >>That scene was very memorable for me even if I was just four.  It was special experience in my life. >>It was a special experience in my life.

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