The Sex Discrimination
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Sometimes, I can find articles about sex discrimination.
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According to articles, there are some disadvantages for women that we can feel easily.
>>According to these articles, there are some disadvantages for women that we can easily feel.
Between men
and women, there are differences but, this doesn't mean that we can justify the
discrimination.
>>Between men and women there are differences but these don't
mean that we can justify sex discrimination.
Speaking of the differences between people, we are now living with a variety of people and each of us has individual characteristics aside from the sex.
>>Speaking of the differences among people, we are now living with various people and each of us has individual characteristics aside from our sexes.
Then, think about how we should deal with the people.
>>Then, think about how we should deal with these people.
Most of us have learnt that we have to treat everyone with respect.
>>Most of us have learned that we have to treat everyone with respect.
Like we've been taught, we should apply this idea to the sex discrimination.
>>Like we've been taught, we should apply this idea when dealing with sex discrimination.
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