The sleeping Beauty.
학생이 쓴 원문
One day princess was born. She is a very cute baby. King and Queen invite many fairies on her birthday but, not invite Brutella . She is a witch.She is a mean and urgly,
Princess grows up,she walks outside. She find a one castle.There is a Brutella house.
Princess touches spinning wheel and then she falls asleep. Everybody same as princess.
Prince sees her, he likes her so much. He kisses her finally she wakes up.
Prince and princess marry and they live happy life. After Brutella falls asleep but never wakes up.
I learned lesson from this story.If I treat someone badly God knows, I might get punishment from God. I have to live good life I am praying every single day also I depend on God’s [이름]ds.
강사 첨삭
You forgot to include articles (A, An, The) and conjunctions (and,so,for,but,yet,or). Also, review your punctuation marks. Be watchful next time ^^
- Teacher Debbie
One day princess was born.
>> Once upon a time, a princess was born.
She is a very cute baby.
>> She was a very cute baby.
King and Queen invite many fairies on her birthday but, not invite Brutella .
>> The King and Queen invited many fairies on her birthday except Brutella.
She is a witch.
>> correct
She is a mean and urgly,
>> She is a mean and ugly witch.
Princess grows up,she walks outside.
Princess grows up,she walks outside.
>> The princess grew up and one day, she wandered outside.
She find a one castle.
>> She found a castle.
There is a Brutella house.
>> Which is Brutella\'s house.
Princess touches spinning wheel and then she falls asleep.
Princess touches spinning wheel and then she falls asleep.
>> The princess touched the spinning wheel and suddenly fell asleep.
Everybody same as princess.
>> And then everyone fell asleep too.
Prince sees her, he likes her so much.
Prince sees her, he likes her so much.
>> When the Prince saw her, he immediately grew fond of her.
He kisses her finally she wakes up.
>> He kissed her and finally, she woke up.
Prince and princess marry and they live happy life.
Prince and princess marry and they live happy life.
>> The prince and princess married each other and lived a happy life.
After Brutella falls asleep but never wakes up.
>> But Brutella never woke up.
I learned lesson from this story.
I learned lesson from this story.
>> I learned a lesson from this story.
If I treat someone badly God knows, I might get punishment from God.
>> correct
I have to live good life
>> I have to live a good life.
I am praying every single day also I depend on God’s [이름]ds.
>> I depend on God\'s [이름]ds that\'s why I am praying every single day.
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