the spiderman

2010-10-01 · 첨삭 강사 abby

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I saw a doll, a funny looking spiderman, in my dean's bag just now. Spiderman!!! It's funny!! Futher, he is a high-lanking official. So I asked him " Is it spiderman? right? He replied shyly "My kid wants the doll." oh god... I forgot that he is a father having cute children. Although he is a grumpy guy, he maybe a good father. Meanwhile, I hated him simply because he nagged me. I was to blame. ㅠ.ㅠ I will try to understand him more and more. Anyway, I don't know what to wear tomrrow. It's too cold to wear a chiffon dress. It is my favorite item.

강사 첨삭

Hi J!!! Happy Friday to you!!! Your story is funny. But who knows maybe your dean is really a good father and gives what his children wanted. ^^ You know what? You didn't give me a hard time checking your composition. Your sentences are all good aside from the misspelled words. Keep it up okay!!! Have a great weekend!!Lei J   I saw a doll, a funny looking Spiderman, in my dean's bag just now.>>correctSpiderman!!! It's funny!!>>correctFurther, he is a high-ranking official.>>correctSo I asked him " Is it spiderman? right?>>So I asked him, "It's spiderman, right? He replied shyly "My kid wants the doll.">>correctoh god...>>correctI forgot that he is a father having cute children.>>correctAlthough he is a grumpy guy, he maybe a good father.>>correctMeanwhile, I hated him simply because he nags at me.>>correctI was to blame. ㅠ.ㅠ>>correctI will try to understand him more and more. >>correctAnyways, I don't know what to wear tomorrow. >>correctIt's too cold to wear a chiffon dress. >>correct It is my favorite item. >>correct

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