The subway's difficult system for visitors.
학생이 쓴 원문
Transferring to another line in subway is very complicated since it was not planned. Seoul is getting bigger and bigger as many people are getting into the city. So, the need for new subway line appeared and when the goverment realized the need, they started to plan and build. In addition, they introduced a new system in order to prevent from making the cards for once and improve the rate of recycle of the cards. What we can do is to rearrange the sign because it seems too small and complicated. We can set an information desk with a receptionist who is fluent in English. The last thing is to reinforce informational signs or brochures about how to use the subway or to transfer.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
Thanks for your message. The reason why I asked about the subway system in Seoul is because I heard it was one of the best in the world, but highly complicated according to you. As you know, there isn't a subway system where I'm from so being in a subway would be quite a new experience for me. Oh well, maybe one of these days I can ride on the Seoul subway, with the help of my Korean friend.
-RJ
Transferring to another line in subway is very complicated since it was not planned.
>>Transferring to another line in a subway is very complicated since it usually is not planned.
Seoul is getting bigger and bigger as many people are getting into the city.
>>Seoul is getting bigger and bigger as many people are moving into the city.
So, the need for new subway line appeared and when the goverment realized the need, they started to plan and build.
>>So, the need for new subway line was proposed and when the goverment realized this need, they started to plan and build.
In addition, they introduced a new system in order to prevent from making the cards for once and improve the rate of recycle of the cards.
>>In addition, they introduced a new system in order to prevent from making the cards disposable and improve the rate of the cards being recycled.
What we can do is to rearrange the sign because it seems too small and complicated.
>>What we can do is to reformat the subway sign because it seems too small and complicated.
We can set an information desk with a receptionist who is fluent in English.
>>correct
The last thing is to reinforce informational signs or brochures about how to use the subway or to transfer.
>> correct
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