The thing I want to change if I can change something in my house
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I’m using a room with my sister so sometimes I want my own room. There’s no problem with my sister but I want my room for a long time. Few years ago I ask my mom to make my room but at that time I’m afraid of sleeping alone. So if I have a chance I want to make my own room and decorate it.
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Hi [이름]! That sounds like a good idea. Imagine all the possibilities that you could do with that much space. You can do a lot of things with that :)
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I’m using a room with my sister so sometimes I want my own room.
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There’s no problem with my sister but I want my room for a long time.
>> There\'s no problem with being with my sister but I have always wanted to have my own room.
Few years ago I ask my mom to make my room but at that time I’m afraid of sleeping alone.
>> Few years ago, I asked my mom if I can have my own room but I was afraid to be along during that time.
So if I have a chance I want to make my own room and decorate it.
>> So if I will have the chance, I want to have my own room and decorate it.
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