The things that I am grateful about.

2020-01-20 · 첨삭 강사 Melody

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In my life, I have lots of grateful things. First of all, I am grateful about my family. someone can say my family is just normal. But that\'s what I want and they more meaningful for me. My family is six person, including my grandparents. they always give me the love and make me feel confident. Second, I thanks to my friend. Though, I can\'t say all of them are kind. but they are good and they lead me good way. Third, I feel grateful about my lucky. It lead me good way and when I try to be something, it make me be something.

강사 첨삭


1. In my life, I have lots of grateful things.
 >>CORRECT

OR>>I have a lot to be grateful for in my life.


2. First of all, I am grateful about my family.

>>CORRECT

OR>>First, I\'m grateful for my family.


3. someone can say my family is just normal.

>>Some people my say that I only have an ordinary family.


4. But that\'s what I want and they more meaningful for me.

>>But that\'s what I want and they are more meaningful to me.


5. My family is six person, including my grandparents.

>>There are six members in my family including my grandparents.


6. they always give me the love and make me feel confident.

>>They always give me love and make me feel confident.


7. Second, I thanks to my friend.

>>Second, I\'m thankful for my friend.


8. Though, I can\'t say all of them are kind.

>>CORRECT
 OR>>Although, not all of them are kind.


9. but they are good and they lead me good way.

>>But they are good and they lead me to the good way.


10. Third, I feel grateful about my lucky.

>>Third, I feel grateful about my luck.


11. It lead me good way and when I try to be something, it make me be something.

>> It leads me to the good way and when I try to be something, it make me that something.


A good life ahead, Bi!

Good essay.


-T. Melody ^^

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