The things to relieve stress

2020-10-12 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

학생이 쓴 원문

Do you always follow the same pattern to relieve stress or do you try different things? I try different things to relieve stress. I mostly listen to the music, and it is the greatest way to relieve stress. I always turn on the music even though I sleep. Listening to music makes me peaceful, and it doesn\'t make me depressed. I also read a book or watch the TV when I have a stress. I read a children\'s book, and it is more interesting than adult\'s book. The world in children\'s book is interesting, peaceful, and happy. So reading a children\'s book makes me live in that world. I also like watching my favorite idols and it relieves my stress. I like the speech that when I am depressed this mood is not eternal and I can change the mood in 5 minutes. I always remind this word when I am depressed in the bed. Then I can wake up and I listen to the music, read a book and eat delicious foods and so on.

강사 첨삭

Good evening, [이름]! 

Thank you for submitting your homework and great job in making it. ^^
It\'s good to know that you try doing different things when it comes to relieving your stress. 
I hope that everything will be peaceful for you and you won\'t get too much stressed. ^^

~Teacher Gina


I try different things to relieve stress.
>> CORRECT.
I mostly listen to the music, and it is the greatest way to relieve stress. 
>> CORRECT.
I always turn on the music even though I sleep. 
>> CORRECT.
Listening to music makes me peaceful, and it doesn\'t make me depressed. 
>> CORRECT.
I also read a book or watch the TV when I have a stress. 
>> I also read a book or watch the TV when I am stressed.
>> Or: I also read a book or watch the TV when I have stress.
I read a children\'s book, and it is more interesting than adult\'s book. 
>> CORRECT.
The world in children\'s book is interesting, peaceful, and happy. 
>> CORRECT.
So reading a children\'s book makes me live in that world.
>> CORRECT.
I also like watching my favorite idols and it relieves my stress. 
>> CORRECT.
I like the speech that when I am depressed this mood is not eternal and I can change the mood in 5 minutes. 
>> CORRECT.
I always remind this word when I am depressed in the bed. 
>> I am always reminded of this word when I am depressed on the bed.
Then I can wake up and I listen to the music, read a book and eat delicious foods and so on.
>> Then I can wake up and I listen to the music, read a book and eat delicious food and so on.

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