The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy.
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Since no one can be sure that the potential risk of nuclear power, a large number of scientists have said the warning of a nuclear explosion. According to them, the unclear causes of nuclear residue might disturb the ecosystem. For instance, nuclear may force the animals and plants to transform their function that could not live and may bring out the mutation living thing in the plant. As a result, the natural habitat could collapse. Furthermore, given that the weapon can engage in fear, it is clear that the use of nuclear as a weapon cannot be a means to remain peaceful in the world.
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>>Because no one can be sure of the potential danger of nuclear power, a large number of scientists have issued warnings of a nuclear explosion.
According to them, the unclear causes of nuclear residue might disturb the ecosystem.
>>CORRECT!
OR: According to them, unclear causes of nuclear residue may disrupt the ecosystem.
For instance, nuclear may force the animals and plants to transform their function that could not live and may bring out the mutation living thing in the plant.
>>CORRECT!
OR: For example, nuclei can force animals and plants to change their non-living functions, or even let mutant organisms emerge from plants.
As a result, the natural habitat could collapse.
>>CORRECT!
Furthermore, given that the weapon can engage in fear, it is clear that the use of nuclear as a weapon cannot be a means to remain peaceful in the world.
>>Furthermore, given that weapons can cause fear, it is clear that using nuclear weapons as weapons cannot be a means to remain peaceful in the world.
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