The true meaning of happiness

2016-01-27 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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What is the true meaning of happiness? I strongly believe that people have their own meaning of happiness. In my case, I have been trying to find my happiness in every little thing of my daily life. When I was young, I was a person who wanted to be a success man who has economic power and wealth. But I realized soon that kind of thought is vain. Because nothing can fully satisfy my needs. So, I gave a lot of thoughts about happiness. When do I feel happy and What can make me happy? After a lot of thought, I made a conclusion. In conclusion is simple. I can be happy when I am doing what I really want to do. So, I have to find what make me happy. And I also need to learn the way to satisfy myself. If we satisfy our current precious moment right now. we can become happy. we need to thank our every little things of everyday life such as our family, our working place and every meal we are having.

강사 첨삭

Great Wednesday morning Mr. [Name]! Hope you had a good sleep and that you are ready for today\'s challenges.

I\'ll see you minutes later and we\'ll talk more about this. Have a great day ahead and God bless! ^^


Always,

Kathrine ^^


What is the true meaning of happiness?


 I strongly believe that people have their own meaning of happiness.

>> correct!
 In my case, I have been trying to find my happiness in every little thing of my daily life. 

>>  In my case, I have been trying to find my happiness in every little thing in my daily life. 
 When I was young, I was a person who wanted to be a success man who has economic power and wealth.

>> When I was young, I wanted to be a successful person who has economic power and wealth.
 But I realized soon that kind of thought is vain. 

>> correct! 
 Because nothing can fully satisfy my needs. 

>> correct! 
 So, I gave a lot of thoughts about happiness. 

>> correct! 
 When do I feel happy and What can make me happy?

>> correct! 
 After a lot of thought, I made a conclusion.
>> correct! 
 In conclusion is simple.

>> The conclusion is simple.

 I can be happy when I am doing what I really want to do.

>> correct!

So, I have to find what make me happy.

>> So, I have to find what makes me happy.
 And I also need to learn the way to satisfy myself.

>> correct! 
 If we satisfy our current precious moment right now. we can become happy.

>>  If we are satisfied with our current precious moment,  we can become happy.
 we need to thank our every little things of everyday life such as our family, our working place and every meal we are having.

>> We need to thank the every little things in our everyday life such as our family, our working place, and every meal that we are having.

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