The way I can help people after a nature disaster
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~~ Teacher Sharon
When I am thinking about nature disasters, the first thing that comes to my mind is an earthquake.
>> When I think of natural disasters, the first thing that comes to mind is an earthquake.
This is because, In Korea, some times happen earthquakes.
>> This is because earthquakes sometimes occur in Korea.
When a earthquake occurs, people send food and water to the camp where some people have evacuated.
>> When an earthquake occurs, people send food and water to the camp where some people have evacuated.
And people volunteer to help them.
>> People volunteer to help them.
In my case, I usually donate for help people.
>> In my case, I usually donate to help other people.
And I try to watch news more often.
>> I also try to watch the news more often.
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