The way to remove stress
학생이 쓴 원문
The best way to remove stress is sleeping all day. Many people said it is not good way to remove stress. Because the stress remains in our brain, not removes. However, it is the best way for me. I can get comfort after sleeping, and have driving force after eating. After I sleep, eat and then I can go out and work. There are other things to removes stress. I usually listen to music, watch TV, and read children books. In past, I cried when I had stress, but it is scared to cry nowadays. My emotion goes to extremes when I cry, so I\'m not willing to cry. I walk outside, look surrounding and breathe deeply.
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>> CORRECT.
Many people said it is not good way to remove stress.
>> Many people said that it is not a good way to remove stress.
Because the stress remains in our brain, not removes.
>> Because the stress remains in our brain and is not removed.
However, it is the best way for me.
>> CORRECT.
I can get comfort after sleeping, and have driving force after eating.
>> I can get comfort after sleeping, and have a driving force after eating.
After I sleep, eat and then I can go out and work.
>> CORRECT.
There are other things to removes stress.
>> There are other things to remove stress.
I usually listen to music, watch TV, and read children books.
>> I usually listen to music, watch TV, and read children\'s books.
In past, I cried when I had stress, but it is scared to cry nowadays.
>> In the past, I cried when I had stress, but it is scary to cry nowadays.
My emotion goes to extremes when I cry, so I\'m not willing to cry.
>> CORRECT.
I walk outside, look surrounding and breathe deeply.
>> I walk outside, look at the surrounding and breathe deeply.
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