The white world.

2010-12-29 · 첨삭 강사 lei

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I used to start the car remotely. But this morning, when I opened my car's door it wasn't opened because it was frozen. So I again and again tried at tne end I opened the door passenger seat. And I drived very carefully at that time I heard some wind sound. Oh my~! driver's seat door opened of all occasion because of melting ice. The white world truly beautiful but It is very difficult either. The roads were frozen and it makes people and car to be hurted. Even you know I have a slipped disk so I was in a double bind. I couldn't drive long and I couldn't walk long too. Finally I decided to drive. Anyway I arrived safely and now I feel comfortable. For now it's the time for enjoying the white world!

강사 첨삭

Hi J!!! I agree that it is dagerous to drive when there's snow. The roads are slippery. So drive safely okay. Take care of yourself dear. See you tomorrow. Lei J   I used to start the car remotely. >>correct But this morning, when I opened my car's door it wasn't opened because it was frozen. >>But this morning, when I tried to to open my cars dood it didn't open because it was forzen. So I again and again tried at tne end I opened the door passenger seat. >>So I tried to open it repeatedly until I decided to open it through the passengers seat. And I drived very carefully at that time I heard some wind sound. >>And I drove carefully as I hear the wind sound. Oh my~! driver's seat door opened of all occasion because of melting ice. >>Oh my!!! The driver's seat opens occasionally because the ice was melting. The white world is truly beautiful but It is very difficult as well. >>correct The roads were frozen and it makes people and car to be hurted. >>The roads were frozen and it can hurt both people and cars. Even you know I have a slipped disk so I was in a double bind. >>As you know, I have a slipped disk so I am double binded. I couldn't drive long and I couldn't walk long too. >>I couldn't drive for a long time and I couldn't walk that long too. Finally I decided to drive. >>correct Anyway I arrived safely and now I feel comfortable. >>correct For now it's time for enjoying the white world! >>correct

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