the world of music

2009-11-19 · 첨삭 강사 Jennifer

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Most of all, musin is one part of our life. we always listen music through te, radio, movie, advertizement. In Korea, the ost(original sound track)is very popular if the movie or music is famous. music makes people pleasurable and compatable. if there are no music in the world, the world will be very dry and boring. Also, music has a lot of function as the article said. according to the article, there are many genres of music. classical, jazz, rock, pop, electronic and so on. my favorite music genre is electronic. i think it's very modern. i like repeated beat and speedy rhythm of electronic music.

강사 첨삭

Most of all, musin is one part of our life. >>Music will always be a part of our lives. we always listen music through te, radio, movie, advertizement. >>We can always hear music through the radio, movies and advertisement. In Korea, the ost(original sound track)is very popular if the movie or music is famous. >>In Korea, an OST is very popular especially if the movie is popular too. music makes people pleasurable and compatable. >>Music makes people feel relaxed and comfortable. >>It makes people happy and entertained. if there are no music in the world, the world will be very dry and boring. >>If there will be no music, the world will be dry and boring. Also, music has a lot of function as the article said. >>According to the article, music has a lot of functions. according to the article, there are many genres of music.classical, jazz, rock, pop, electronic and so on. >>They also mentioned about the different genres of music. Some of them are: classical, jazz, rock, pop, electronic and so on. my favorite music genre is electronic. think it's very modern.i like repeated beat and speedy rhythm of electronic music. >>My favorite music genre is electronic (trance music) because it is very modern and I like it because of its repetitive beat and speedy rhythm.    

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