The worst disease
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Hello sir,
With the help of modern science, many diseases which cannot be cured in the past can be cured now. But because of the abundance of fast food and due to our love of things done in an instant, many diseases are also coming out. People\'s neglect of his surroundings also contribute to a lot of diseases now. What is the worst disease? I think any disease which is still incurable now can be considered as the worst disease. See you on Friday sir!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
Disease occurs when the balance of physical was collasped.
>>Disease occurs when the balance of our physical body collapses.
The directive cause of illness is food and bad habit and stress.
>>The direct cause of illness is food, bad habit and stress.
The body reacts about the signals that these three elements are stimulated.
>>The body reacts on the signals that these three elements have stimulated.
And the body try to keep equilibrium by itself.
>>And the body tries to keep the equilibrium by itself.
But when people ignored the warning signaland strongly effected three elements, finally disease occurs.
>>But when people ignore the warning signal then it strongly affects the three elements finally, disease occurs.
People should be notice the signal and warning through the body.
>>People should notice the signal and warning given by the body.
Therefore people can prevent disease.
>>correct!
I think there is no worst disease.
>>correct!
It is only the difference that people can cure the disease or not cure.
>>It is only the difference if people can cure the disease or not.
It is a difference of medical technology.
>>It depends on the medical technology.
And It is depends on the fate and his efforts to improve the situation.
>>And It depends on his fate and his efforts to improve the situation.
Diabetes and cancel and heart disease is different cure rate in medical technology.
>>Diabetes, cancer and heart disease have different cure rates in medical technology.
The other disease is similiar to that.
>>The other disease is similar to that.
What is it regard a difference of medical technology as a worst disease.
What is regarded as incurable by medical technology is the worst disease.
I don\'t think so.
>>correct!
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