The zoo helps animals.

2019-03-07 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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The zoo can helps animals. It can be a home for endangered species or animals that have nowhere to live. At first, the zoo would have been built for viewing purposes. However, humans destroyed nature, leaving no place for animals to live. So it seems that it was forced to protect animals, not the original purpose.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you for taking the time to write an essay about this topic.
I agree that zoos can be of help to animals although most of them don\'t provide the ideal environment for the animals.
I still believe that the best way to protect the animals is to stop destroying their natural habitat.

Anyhow, that\'s just my point-of-view.

I hope you\'re doing great.

See you again on Tuesday.
Have a happy weekend. :)
~Teacher Charry ^^


The zoo can helps animals.

>> The zoo can help animals.
It can be a home for endangered species or animals that have nowhere to live.

>> CORRECT!
At first, the zoo would have been built for viewing purposes.

>> At first, a zoo is built for viewing purposes.
However, humans destroyed nature, leaving no place for animals to live.

>> However, humans have destroyed nature, leaving no place for animals to live.
So it seems that it was forced to protect animals, not the original purpose.

>> So it seems that they are now forced to protect animals and not serve its original purpose.

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