there is no way to feel alcohol drinkers mind.

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Alcohol is the best beverage sold in the world.

>> Correct!
I don\'t understand them who want to drink a beer or so-ju when they feel upset.

>> I don\'t understand the people who want to drink beer or Soju when they feel upset.
One of my friend said to me that alcohol makes me feel like walking in the sky.

>> Did you mean: One of my friend told me that alcohol will make me feel like walking in the sky.

>> OR: One of my friend told me that alcohol will make me feel lighter.
I didn\'t agree with him. because I always feel dizzy when I drink alcohol.

>> I didn\'t agree with him because I always feel dizzy when I drink alcohol. (Be mindful of your punctuation marks. )
But Alcohol has attractive things. 

>> But alcohol has the way to attract people.
they give people courage.

>> It gives them courage.
Courage to talk their real feelings, to do something with audacity.

>> The courage to talk about their real feelings, to do something with audaciously.
So I think they want to drink alcohol because they don\'t have enough courage.

>> Correct!
If they have courage, they don\'t have to drink it.

>> Did you mean: If they have enough of it, they don\'t have to drink alcohol.

>> OR: if they are courageous, they don\'t have to drink it.