They all have their private life regardless of their job.
학생이 쓴 원문
Job is a mean of supporting life.
People used to play after finishing job.
All men have a separate jobs.
And we play altogether after finishing job.
When you iritated by something, please relax.
Thanks for reading.
Bye.
강사 첨삭
Good evening, [이름]. Thank you for taking the time in making your homework. I\'m happy that you practiced your writing and grammar skills by putting your ideas into words. Just be careful with your punctuation marks.^_^
They all have their private life regardless of their job.
>>>They all have their private life, regardless of their job.
All men have a separate jobs.
>>>All men have separate jobs.
OR>>>All men have different jobs.
And we play altogether after finishing job.
>>>And we play altogether after finishing our jobs.
When you iritated by something, please relax.
>>>When you were irritated by something, just relax.
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