Things to do, if I was on a desert island alone?
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First of all I have to look for water and dried trees. but if there aren't any trees on a desert island, I have to make drinking water.
Since seawater includes an amount of salts, I have to filter out seawater to drinking water. We can make drinking water by using sand.
Once making drinking water, My life time extended.
And then I have to wait to be rescued.
If it were not for answer to be rescued, I'd better dig a grave. ^^
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Hi [이름]!
Good composition!
You expressed your ideas really well and the last part was kinda funny.
First of all I have to look for water and dried trees.
>> First of all, I have to look for water and dried trees.
But if there aren't any trees on a desert island, I have to make drinking water.>>But if there aren't any trees on the island, I have to make drinking water.Since seawater includes an amount of salts, I have to filter out seawater to drinking water.
>> Since seawater includes some amount of salt, I have to filter out seawater to make drinking water.
We can make drinking water by using sand.>>CorrectOnce making drinking water, My life time extended.
>>Once I’ve made drinking water, my lifetime can be extended.And then I have to wait to be rescued.
>>CorrectIf it were not for answer to be rescued, I'd better dig a grave. ^^
>>If there isn’t any answer to my rescue call, I’d better dig a grave.
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