Think of a group project, pick your team members and explain how they could be useful.

2017-08-22 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

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when i worked at a event organization company, we had to build a promotion event that notice the 103 years anniversary between Korea and France. First, we discussed events lists that how people can know the anniversatry familiarly and pleasantly. my superior divided up the work between members. During preparing the event, there were many tricky times like conflicting between members. But we did it and it was successful also clients were satisfied.

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Good day [이름]!

Thanks for dropping by the board, [이름]! I revised some of your sentences and I hope it would be a great help. You were great. Keep your ideas flowing!

See you ^^

Ciao ^^

~T. Eunice

when i worked at a event organization company, we had to build a promotion event that notice the 103 years anniversary between Korea and France.
>>> When I worked at an event organization company, we had to build a promotional event that notice the 103 years anniversary between Korea and France.
First, we discussed events lists that how people can know the anniversatry familiarly and pleasantly.
>> First, we discussed about the event\'s lists on how to educate people about the anniversary pleasantly.
my superior divided up the work between members.
>> My superior divided the work between members.
During preparing the event, there were many tricky times like conflicting between members.
>> During the preparation of the event, there were many difficult times like conflicts between members.
But we did it and it was successful also clients were satisfied.
>> But we did it successfully and most specially our clients were very satisfied.

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