Third homework

2022-03-15 · 첨삭 강사 Rina

학생이 쓴 원문

The best way to find a job. First, individual efforts are needed to find a job. The company checks the individual\'s abilities and decides whether to work together or not. You have to develop and study your abilities to develop yourself. And, you have to show your consistency with positive thoughts. Positive thoughts have a good influence. People like positive people and prefer sincere people. Finally, you have to express yourself. You have to express your thoughts with confidence. It is a necessary part to talk to other colleagues, solve problems, and have good relationships. This effort will help you find a job.

강사 첨삭

Great Tuesday to you, Hazel! ^^
I agree with your thoughts and ideas. 
Your sentences are correct and I just provided some alternatives. ^^
See you in class!

- T. Rina


1. First, individual efforts are needed to find a job.
>> CORRECT!

2. The company checks the individual\'s abilities and decides whether to work together or not.
>> CORRECT!
OR: The company checks the individual\'s abilities and decides whether he or she gets hired or not. 

3. You have to develop and study your abilities to develop yourself.
>> You have to develop and study your abilities to improve yourself.

4. And, you have to show your consistency with positive thoughts.
>> CORRECT!

5. Positive thoughts have a good influence.
>> CORRECT!

6. People like positive people and prefer sincere people.
>> CORRECT!
OR: A lot of people prefer optimistic and sincere individuals.

7. Finally, you have to express yourself.
>> CORRECT!

8. You have to express your thoughts with confidence.
>> CORRECT!

9. It is a necessary part to talk to other colleagues, solve problems, and have good relationships.
>> CORRECT!

10. This effort will help you find a job.
>> CORRECT!

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