This is my homework that I promised with you!

2018-07-20 · 첨삭 강사 Elisha

학생이 쓴 원문

<<1. Why did you chose this major>> My major is Industrial Engineering. I took it up at the Ajou University Ever since I was young, I have always been passionate about math. And also I am good in mathematic. Especially in other subjects, I didn’t feel interested. So that is reason why I choose this major that usually using math As you know, I know that working in Industrial Engineer can provide me become an Engineer who is not bound to the field. <<2. research of KW International>> - KW international is one of the best and fastest growing logistic and SCM companies in U.S - They have a main center in six locations and 16 sub-stations. In addition, it has branches in Korea, China and Canada. - They has over 1,000 employees - I found out that your CEO, Kilwon Jin, started the company in 1997 - What impressed me the most about your company was the sentence that Our success in our customer’s success. I think so too that is most important to servies company. <<3. What do you know about the job position you are applying for? >> I applied for the data analysis position. This position mainly required data collection and processing skill. it is necessary to be able to select data that is suitable for the purpose among the countless data. And after collection I should be able to predict the outlook based on this data.

강사 첨삭

Hello John! Thank you for sending me your homework. I think you really prepared for your answers and for that I commend you. Keep up the good work! Let\'s practice more later. See you! =)

~Teacher Elisha

<<1. Why did you chose this major>>

=> My major is Industrial Engineering.

>> CORRECT!
OR:
>> I am majoring in Industrial Engineering.
 I took it up at the Ajou University

>> I took it up at Ajou University.

or:

>> I took it up at Ajou University in ‎Suwon, South Korea.
 Ever since I was young, I have always been passionate about math.

>> CORRECT!
OR:

>> Ever since I was young, I have always been passionate about Mathematics.

And also I am good in mathematic.

>> I am also good in Mathematics.

Especially in other subjects, I didn’t feel interested.

>> I am not that interested in other subjects.
 So that is reason why I choose this major that usually using math

>> The reason why I chose this major is because it usually uses Math.
 As you know, I know that working in Industrial Engineer can provide me become an Engineer who is not bound to the field.

>>  As you know, I know that working as an Industrial Engineer can make me an engineer who is not bound to the field.
<< 2. research of KW International>>
 - KW international is one of the best and fastest growing logistic and SCM companies in U.S

>> CORRECT!
 - They have a main center in six locations and 16 sub-stations.

>> CORRECT!
In addition, it has branches in Korea, China and Canada.

>> In addition to that, it also has branches in Korea, China and Canada.
 - They has over 1,000 employees

>> CORRECT!
 - I found out that your CEO, Kilwon Jin, started the company in 1997

>> CORRECT!
- What impressed me the most about your company was the sentence that Our success in our customer’s success.

>> What impressed me the most is your company slogan which says, \"Our success is our customers\' success\".
 I think so too that is most important to servies company.

>> I also think that it is the most important service a company should provide it\'s customers.
<< 3. What do you know about the job position you are applying for? >>
 I applied for the data analysis position.

>> I am applying for the data analyzer position.
 This position mainly required data collection and processing skill.

>>  This position mainly requires data collection and processing skills.
 it is necessary to be able to select data that is suitable for the purpose among the countless data.

>>  It is necessary to be able to select the data which is suitable for the purpose, among the other data presented.
 And after collection I should be able to predict the outlook based on this data. 

>>  After collecting the data, I should be able to predict the outcome based on the data I used. 

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