This is my homework that I promised with you!
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Hello John! Thank you for sending me your homework. I think you really prepared for your answers and for that I commend you. Keep up the good work! Let\'s practice more later. See you! =)
~Teacher Elisha
<<1. Why did you chose this major>>
=> My major is Industrial Engineering.
>> CORRECT!
OR:
>> I am majoring in Industrial Engineering.
I took it up at the Ajou University
>> I took it up at Ajou University.
or:
>> I took it up at Ajou University in Suwon, South Korea.
Ever since I was young, I have always been passionate about math.
>> CORRECT!
OR:
>> Ever since I was young, I have always been passionate about Mathematics.
And also I am good in mathematic.
>> I am also good in Mathematics.
Especially in other subjects, I didn’t feel interested.
>> I am not that interested in other subjects.
So that is reason why I choose this major that usually using math
>> The reason why I chose this major is because it usually uses Math.
As you know, I know that working in Industrial Engineer can provide me become an Engineer who is not bound to the field.
>> As you know, I know that working as an Industrial Engineer can make me an engineer who is not bound to the field.
<< 2. research of KW International>>
- KW international is one of the best and fastest growing logistic and SCM companies in U.S
>> CORRECT!
- They have a main center in six locations and 16 sub-stations.
>> CORRECT!
In addition, it has branches in Korea, China and Canada.
>> In addition to that, it also has branches in Korea, China and Canada.
- They has over 1,000 employees
>> CORRECT!
- I found out that your CEO, Kilwon Jin, started the company in 1997
>> CORRECT!
- What impressed me the most about your company was the sentence that Our success in our customer’s success.
>> What impressed me the most is your company slogan which says, \"Our success is our customers\' success\".
I think so too that is most important to servies company.
>> I also think that it is the most important service a company should provide it\'s customers.
<< 3. What do you know about the job position you are applying for? >>
I applied for the data analysis position.
>> I am applying for the data analyzer position.
This position mainly required data collection and processing skill.
>> This position mainly requires data collection and processing skills.
it is necessary to be able to select data that is suitable for the purpose among the countless data.
>> It is necessary to be able to select the data which is suitable for the purpose, among the other data presented.
And after collection I should be able to predict the outlook based on this data.
>> After collecting the data, I should be able to predict the outcome based on the data I used.
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