This time of the lunar new year\'s day is good to me as I think.

2019-02-11 · 첨삭 강사 Rosie

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This time of hollydays is a bit meaningful to me because I spent the day with my family. In older days I went to the my relatives\' house to make a ritual greeting of the new year and to receive the blessing. But the time has passes by and the surrounding of mine changed a lot. And I am growing up now. I want to see the full moon in accordance of upcoming the new day. Thanks for reading. Bye.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Wee!

Thank you so much for doing your homework ^^

I hope you are having a great day ☺


This time of hollydays is a bit meaningful to me because I spent the day with my family.

>> This time is a bit meaningful to me because I spent the day with my family.


In older days I went to the my relatives\' house to make a ritual greeting of the new year and to receive the blessing.

>> I went to my relative\'s house to have a greeting ritual for the new year for us to receive more blessings.


But the time has passes by and the surrounding of mine changed a lot.

>> However, as time passes by, my surroundings change.


And I am growing up now.

>> I am a grown man now.


I want to see the full moon in accordance of upcoming the new day.

>> I want to see the full moon in accordance with the upcoming new day.


Thanks for reading.
Bye.

>> CORRECT

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