Three jobs I can be good at!

2020-02-10 · 첨삭 강사 Elly

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Hi, I just show you my jobs that i can be good at. (Not really good at) First one is coding. Actually, My Second major is \"Computer Engineering\". I learned about computers and programming in that. And my Club was made by people interested in development. I love my skill and be proud of it. When I go to London for walking Holiday with work visa. I want get a job to show my skill. Second one is jogging.I love walking alone with many things to think of. When I have a stress for work or circumstances, I just walk for my house. I takes a few minute. But I feel much better. Lastone is playing with my younger brother. He loves me(maybe?)

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Hi [이름],

Thank you for the homework!

Have a nice day and talk to you later!

TEACHER ELLY.

Three jobs I can be good at!

Hi, I just show you my jobs that i can be good at. (Not really good at)

>>Hi, I just want to tell you the jobs that I can be good at. (I’m not really good at them).

First one is coding.

>>The first one is coding.

Actually, My Second major is \"Computer Engineering\".

>>Actually, my Second major is Computer Engineering.

I learned about computers and programming in that.

>>I learned about computers and programming on this major.

And my Club was made by people interested in development.

>>And my club was made up of people who are interested in developments.

I love my skill and be proud of it.

>>I love my skill and I’m proud of it.

When I go to London for walking Holiday with work visa.

>>When I went to London on a Working Holiday visa.

I want get a job to show my skill.

>>I want to get a job to show my skills.

Second one is jogging.

>>The second one is jogging.

I love walking alone with many things to think of.

>>I love walking alone while thinking about many things.

When I have a stress for work or circumstances, I just walk for my house.

>>When I have stress because of work or because of some circumstances, I just take a walk near my house.

I takes a few minute.

>>It takes just a few minutes.

But I feel much better.

CORRECT!

or>>But I feel a lot better afterwards.

Lastone is playing with my younger brother.

>>The last one is playing with my younger brother.

He loves me(maybe?) 

CORRECT!

or>>Maybe, he loves me too. 

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