Three most important things to be happy.

2017-11-14 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

What is happiness? Somebody said that happiness is on your mind. It is important to have a positive mind. If you see a world with your positive mind, you can see all things positively. But If you look at the world negatively, you will look everything negatively. I want to be happy. Is it possible with only my positive mind? I think my positive mind is first option. Secondly, it is important to have a stable and harmonious family. Korean proverb said "when one's home is harmonious, all goes well". In order to maintain a harmonious family, it is necessary to communicate and converse well among family members. Parents should not be forced to tell their stories to their children but to listen to their children's stories. After parents listen to their children's stories, they should communicate and converse with their children. I think this is very important. Most parent only forced to their children unilaterally. And the third important thing is economic problem. In other word, it's money.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]!(\",)

So are you saying communication is the key to happiness? I guess so. Most people nowadays don\'t really communicate. They often act like they are listening but they really are doing or thinking something else.

Take care!(\",)

~T. Lynn

What is happiness? Somebody said that happiness is on your mind.

>> correct!

It is important to have a positive mind.

>> correct!

 If you see a world with your positive mind, you can see all things positively.

>> If you look at the world with a positive mind, you can see all things positively.

But If you look at the world negatively, you will look at everything negatively.

>> correct!

I want to be happy. Is it possible with only my positive mind?

>> correct!

I think my positive mind is first option.

>> I think having a positive mind is just the first step.

Secondly, it is important to have a stable and harmonious family.

>> correct!

Korean proverb said \"when one\'s home is harmonious, all goes well\".

>> A Korean proverb says, \"when one\'s home is harmonious, all goes well\".

In order to maintain a harmonious family, it is necessary to communicate and converse well among family members.

>> correct!

Parents should not be forced to tell their stories to their children but to listen to their children\'s stories.

>> Parents should not force their children to listen to their stories but rather they should listen to their children\'s stories.

After parents listen to their children\'s stories, they should communicate and converse with their children.

>> correct!

I think this is very important.

>> correct!

Most parent only forced to their children unilaterally.

>> Most parent sonly force their children unilaterally.

 And the third important thing is economic problem. In other word, it\'s money.

>> correct!

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