Three Reasons Why I Am Afraid of The Dark
학생이 쓴 원문
I am obviously afraid of the dark. First, I start to be nervous when the sunsets. There are scientific pieces of evidence that the sun gives us energy not only physically, but also psychologically. Thus I think the reason why I start to be nervous when the dark comes is related to this scientific side. If the sun sets, one thing that can give me energy disappears. Second, I realize the truth that I didn\'t finish some assignments that I must do today. Sunsets mean the close of the day is coming and when I still have something to do which is due today, I hate myself that I didn\'t live a productive day and start to be afraid since I\'m not sure that if I can meet the deadline. Third, I believe ghosts. Some people say that ghosts exist for people who believe in the existence of ghosts. Even though I am frightened of spiritual being, I cannot help believing those things, for I fantasize about an afterlife and reincarnation. In conclusion, I am afraid of the dark for these three reasons.
강사 첨삭
I think that because you are such a productive person, 24 hours isn\'t enough. ^^
I admire that about you.
Someday I hope you find peace in the darkness, instead of fear.
After all, there can be no light without darkness. ^^
~t. Ally
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I am obviously afraid of the dark.
>> CORRECT!
First, I start to be nervous when the sunsets.
>> First, I start being nervous when the sun sets.
There are scientific pieces of evidence that the sun gives us energy not only physically, but also psychologically.
>> CORRECT!
Thus I think the reason why I start to be nervous when the dark comes is related to this scientific side.
>> Thus I think the reason why I start being nervous when the darkness comes is related to this scientific phenomenon.
If the sun sets, one thing that can give me energy disappears.
>> CORRECT!
Second, I realize the truth that I didn\'t finish some assignments that I must do today.
>> Second, I realize the truth that I didn\'t finish some assignments that I must do on that day.
Sunsets mean the close of the day is coming and when I still have something to do which is due today, I hate myself that I didn\'t live a productive day and start to be afraid since I\'m not sure that if I can meet the deadline.
>> Sunsets mean the end of the day is coming and when I still have something to do which is due on that day, I hate myself because I didn\'t live a productive day and start to be afraid since I\'m not sure if I can meet the deadline.
Third, I believe ghosts.
>> Third, I believe in ghosts.
Some people say that ghosts exist for people who believe in the existence of ghosts.
>> CORRECT!
Even though I am frightened of spiritual being, I cannot help believing those things, for I fantasize about an afterlife and reincarnation.
>> Even though I am frightened of spiritual beings, I cannot help believing those things, for I fantasize about an afterlife and reincarnation.
In conclusion, I am afraid of the dark for these three reasons.
>> In conclusion, I am afraid of the dark because these three reasons.
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