Thursday homework
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Claire\'s homework
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Hello claire!
Great job on your Thursday composition homework! I hope someday we can really go on an adventure. See you next week! ^^
~~Teacher Kate
I want to go on an adventure to a desert.
>>CORRECT!
Because I want to swim and drink from oasis.
>>It\'s because I want to swim and drink from an oasis.
I think water from oasis is really refreshing and give me a power.
>>I think water from an oasis is really refreshing and it gives me power.
Also I want to ride a camel and lead them to the right way.
>>CORRECT!
And I want to check about cactuses are growing well in the desert.
>>And I want to check whether cactuses grow well in the desert.
Mabe during travel desert I can make a lot of sandcastles.
>>Maybe, during my travel in the desert, I can make a lot of sandcastles.
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