Thursday homework
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Claire\'s homework
강사 첨삭
Hello Claire!
Thank you for making your homework for last week! You did a lot haha. Great job Claire. See you in class ^^
~~Teacher Kate
It is really fun to visit zoo and see the many animals.
>>It is really fun to visit zoo and see the many animals there.
But sometimes it is little bit sad because the animals are the living things and they can’t stay with there parents.
>>But sometimes it is a little bit sad because the animals are living things and they can’t stay with their parents.
Hunters catch the animals and the animals didn’t has choice.
>>Hunters catch the animals and the animals didn’t have a choice.
They has to follow the hunters.
>>They have to follow the hunters.
Then they adopted by a zoo.
>>Then, they are adopted by a zoo.
I think they will stay really scary and sad.
>>I think they will stay really scared and sad.
Forexample we are live with our family happily.
>>Unlike them, we live with our family happily.
One day, the hunters catch our parents or siblings and we can’t see them anymore.
>>Imagine one day when the hunters catch our parents or siblings and we can’t see them anymore.
We has to give animals freedom.
>>We have to give animals freedom.
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