Thursday Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Claire\'s homework
강사 첨삭
Hello Claire!
Thank you for making your homework for Thursday! See you! ^^
~~teacher Kate
Global warming is serious problem for now it is getting more serious when everyone don’t give attention to global warming.
>>Global warming is a serious problem for now it is getting more serious if everyone doesn’t give attention to global warming.
It is the time that we need to accept that global warming is a serious problem on the Earth there is no time left from now on.
>>CORRECT!
If we didn’t start to solve this problem from now, we don’t know what will happen to our Earth and people live in the future.
>>If we didn’t start to solve this problem now, we won\'t know what will happen to our Earth and the people who will live in the future.
Many people make street dirty, use many oils, use a lot of dish washing soaps so the soil and sea water are getting dirty.
>>Many people make the streets dirty, use many oils, use a lot of dish washing soap so the soil and sea water are getting dirty.
Before the transportations, industry and many devices get more developed, the Earth was clean and living things are healthy.
>>Before the transportation, industry and many devices were developed, the Earth was clean and living things were healthy.
Because of a global warming many animals are died usually polar bears died out because icebergs are melting until now.
>>Because of a global warming many animals died. Usually polar bears die because icebergs are slowly melting now.
Animals, people, forest, all of them has to live together if we want to make Earth live older and healthy we can try from small things.
>>Animals, people, forest, all of them have to live together if we want to make Earth live longer and healthier we can start with small things.
For example don’t use single using things and use glass cups think about healthy polar bears and penguins.
>>For example don’t use disposable things and use glass cups. Think about the health of polar bears and penguins.
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