Thursday Homework
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Claire\'s homework
강사 첨삭
Hello Claire!
Thank you for your efforts in writing this homework composition. See you in class! ^^
~~Teacher Kate
I think ancestral rites tradition is disappearing slowly as time flows in Korea.
>>CORRECT!
Koreans were influenced by Confucianism for a long time but not for now.
>>Koreans were influenced by Confucianism for a long time but not anymore.
But they have the culture of Confucianism for now.
>>But, they still have Confucian-inspired culture now.
But people disagree with that usually women.
>>People, usually women, disagree with that.
Because according to Confucianism rules, they discriminate women.
>>Because according to Confucianism rules, woman are discriminated against.
And ancestral rites is one of the Confucianism rules.
>>Ancestral rites is one of the Confucian-inspired traditions.
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