Thursday homework
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK:
What is something you\'re not good at but you really like doing?
It\'s some sort of game named Palace3D.
This game starts from the Korean past.
Story of court ladies in the palace in the past.
If we fulfill the mission such as get the silk, make clothes, and give it to someone.
It is past palace life role-playing.
This was an example when it comes to real game playing more complicated.
But I\'m not good at this game because it is complicated.
I\'m not good at this game, because if we reach a particular level, we can\'t play without buying some in the game.
I looked out for every way to level up without buying.
But there was nothing.
This kind of game is a lot in the play store.
Although among those buying games, I really liked the palace3D game.
강사 첨삭
Hello Claire!
Thanks for your efforts! Enjoy the weekend!
~~Teacher Kate
>>CORRECT!
This game starts from the Korean past.
This game starts from the Korean past.
>>The game is set in ancient Korea.
Story of court ladies in the palace in the past.
Story of court ladies in the palace in the past.
>>It\'s the story of court ladies in the palace in the past.
If we fulfill the mission such as get the silk, make clothes, and give it to someone.
If we fulfill the mission such as get the silk, make clothes, and give it to someone.
>>We have to fulfill the missions such as getting the silk, making clothes, and giving it to someone.
It is past palace life role-playing.
It is past palace life role-playing.
>>It\'s a role-playing game about ancient palace life.
This was an example when it comes to real game playing more complicated.
This was an example when it comes to real game playing more complicated.
>>This was an example when real game playing becomes more complicated.
But I\'m not good at this game because it is complicated.
But I\'m not good at this game because it is complicated.
>>CORRECT!
I\'m not good at this game, because if we reach a particular level, we can\'t play without buying some in the game.
I\'m not good at this game, because if we reach a particular level, we can\'t play without buying some in the game.
>>I\'m not good at this game, because if we reach a particular level, we can\'t play without buying something in the game.
I looked out for every way to level up without buying.
I looked out for every way to level up without buying.
>>I looked for every way to level up without buying.
But there was nothing.
But there was nothing.
>>CORRECT!
This kind of game is a lot in the play store.
This kind of game is a lot in the play store.
>>There are lot of games like this in the play store.
Although among those buying games, I really liked the palace3D game.
Although among those buying games, I really liked the palace3D game.
>>Although among those games with in-app purchasing, I really liked the palace3D game the most.
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