"time box" for the futher

2012-09-10 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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If I have to put my valuable culture in "time box", there are a few things I like. The first thing I put in is my MP3 player which was bought from 3 years ago. I nomally enjoy listening to music while I'm on the way somewhere. It's great way to cheer myself up. so, I really want to bring MP3 player for the future. Another thing I want to is several of pictures. The reason is that I love to take a picture of scenery and capture the moment of my family and friends. So if I live in the future, It is good for me to remind my past.

강사 첨삭

  Hello there:) Thanks for spending some time working on your homework. ^^ Just keep doing things that will help you improve your skills everyday!! ^^ See you later!! :) If I have to put my valuable culture in \"time box\", there are a few things I like. >> If I am going to put my valuable culture in a \"time box\", there are few things that I would put there.The first thing I put in is my MP3 player which was bought from 3 years ago. >> The first thing that I put I am going to put in that box is my MP3 player which I bought 3 years ago. I nomally enjoy listening to music while I\'m on the way somewhere. >> I nomally enjoy listening to music while traveling. It\'s great way to cheer myself up. >> It\'s a great way to cheer myself up. so, I really want to bring MP3 player for the future. >> So I really want to bring my MP3 player in the future.Another thing I want to is several of pictures. >> Other things that I would like to bring are my pictures. The reason is that I love to take a picture of scenery and capture the moment of my family and friends. >> I love taking pictures of beautiful sceneries and capture the moment of my family and friends. So if I live in the future, It is good for me to remind my past. >> So it is a good reminder about my past.

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