tip for relationship.

2011-02-15 · 첨삭 강사 lei

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It's bad manners to put down people. So sometimes people who talk ill of others, they think It's OK. But it makes people hurt really seriously. so you should avoid to put down people. and the other method is think positive, don't care about other's opinion. Just think you are right, others are wrong. second, smile, before bring down whole people who stand with you. Positive think makes you smile and smile also makes others smile. It's don't have any time to be sad, depressed. third, Sometimes it's really important to break down works between group. If it is wrong, some complains accumulate. It is going to be collapse. you should listen others opinion and reference all method which make group harmony. But the important thing is how much attention you can in your relations.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!! You have here an interesting composition. I agree that talking ill to other people is really bad. So don't do this okay. Anyways, kindly check on the corrections that I made for your sentences. Take care. Lei J   It's bad manners to put down people. >>It's a bad habit to put down people. So sometimes people who talk ill of others, they think It's OK. >>So sometimes people who talk ill of others think that it's okay. But it makes people hurt really seriously. >>But it hurts people seriously. so you should avoid to put down people. >>So you should avoid putting down others. and the other method is think positive, don't care about other's opinion. >>And the other method is positive thinking, don't give much importance on what other people think about you. Just think you are right, others are wrong. >>Just think that you are right and others are wrong. second, smile, before bring down whole people who stand with you. >>Secondly, smile before bringing an army of people who stand by your side. Positive think makes you smile and smile also makes others smile. >>Positive thinking makes you smile and by smiling it will make other people smile. It's don't have any time to be sad, depressed. >>Don't make time being sad or depressed. third, Sometimes it's really important to break down works between group. >>Thirdly, sometimes it is really important to break down a task between groups. If it is wrong, some complains accumulate. >>If it is wrong, it will accumulate complains. It is going to be collapse. >>it is going to collapse. you should listen others opinion and reference all method which make group harmony. >>You should listen to other's opinions and give reference to which one can bring harmony to the group. But the important thing is how much attention you can in your relations. >>But the most important thing is how much attention you can give in making relationships.

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