To a higher level
학생이 쓴 원문
The vision of my company is \'Progress for Humanity\' and it influenced me the most when I joined the company.
We need to operate not only car business but also new business models to affect in human\'s life.
In this context, my company is investing in various businesses like robotics, software service, energy to connect businesses.
And also, It is important to draw rational price model to attract more customers than other competitors.
By considering partnerships with other companys in different industry and accepting the changes positively, we can lead company to a higher level.
강사 첨삭
Hey there, Yu[이름]! Thank you for sparing your time to complete your homework. I agree that the steps your company is taking will definitely bring more success. I\'m also happy to know that your company\'s vision has a great influence on you.
~~T. Jenna
The vision of my company is \'Progress for Humanity\' and it influenced me the most when I joined the company.
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>>The \'Progress for Humanity\' vision resonated with me the most when I joined the company.
We need to operate not only car business but also new business models to affect in human\'s life.
>>We need to operate not only the car business but also new business models to impact human lives.
In this context, my company is investing in various businesses like robotics, software service, energy to connect businesses.
>>In this context, my company is investing in various businesses like robotics, software service, and energy to connect businesses.
And also, It is important to draw rational price model to attract more customers than other competitors.
>>It is also important to develop a rational pricing model to attract more customers than our competitors.
By considering partnerships with other companys in different industry and accepting the changes positively, we can lead company to a higher level.
>>By considering partnerships with other companies in different industries and accepting the changes positively, we can lead the company to a higher level.
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