To advise the other one
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If I advise someone who is depressed, I will say that you should run just 10 minutes a day. I have overcome with running when I depressed. The running can make some neurotransmitters such as dopamine and serotonin. Those are effects to our brain and make us happy.
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Hi there, Thomas.
You surely know how to overcome and succeed depression. In truth, we all get depressed sometimes only in different levels. This is something not taught in schools but one that we have to experience and go through to learn.
Then, keep running, loving, and making yourself better to add more value to who you are. That is attractive to women.
Go over my suggestions below and make sure to note down the correct patterns to make your speech and writing better. Well done!
See you!
-T. Donna~
>> If I advise someone who is depressed, I will say that this person should run just 10 minutes a day.
I have overcome with running when I depressed.
>> I have overcome with running when I\'m depressed.
The running can make some neurotransmitters such as dopamine and serotonin.
>> Running can make some neurotransmitters such as dopamine and serotonin.
Those are effects to our brain and make us happy.
>> Correct!
Or: Those are the effects to our brain and make us happy.
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